I know you’re focusing on the firing, but when you were describing all the treatments, I found myself feeling rushed, like I wanted scenes with each of those experiences. Do you think you’ll be including those at some point, or can you ease us through the experience of trying to deal with the migraines before getting to the firing?

I don’t know if I’m expressing myself well. I just really want to see Nora living through the aromatherapy, etc. If you had those scenes before the firing, you could also intersperse them with scenes at work and sort of unfold how much of a cretin the “minion supervisor” is instead of packing that all into a few dense paragraphs.(I love “minion,” makes it seem like perhaps he’s in league with the demon migraines!)

Does that help? Would you rather I shut up now?

Hmmm…maybe I can sneak in some of those weird things “she” tried into some of the scenes as they roll forward. That’s a good idea. Thanks!

Maybe I’ll even recreate the meditation panic attack. It wasn’t funny to me then, but thinking about it now — I mean, who has a panic attack when you’re supposed to be calm and intraspective and floating in the nothingness?

I think those are all great ideas, the meditation panic attack (you could make that really funny), starting six months earlier, and shading Nora as not a saint (no one is).

I like that you’re using 3rd person here (I can’t because I’m writing in journal/diary format) and I love the name Nora! Forgot to tell you that.

I would like to have you to check in with this month, if you wouldn’t mind. Someone more “anonymous” than my newly discovered local buddy. If that sounds good to you, we can either do it here or via e-mail. I have an excerpt up at the NaNo board — I’ll send you a link.